@Catherine -- This story has far more problems than plot: point of view is all over the place, floating body parts, a clueless hero. All that in less than 150 words. I do like the heroine's dialog, though, which leads me to Tam's comment.
@Tam -- "Is there another step to this quest?" Apparently not, since another step in the quest chain would have advanced the plot. :P
Excellent! I'm sure there are plenty of novels on the market with a similar plot, too...
ReplyDeleteSo is there another step to this quest?
ReplyDeletelol, very good.
@Catherine -- This story has far more problems than plot: point of view is all over the place, floating body parts, a clueless hero. All that in less than 150 words. I do like the heroine's dialog, though, which leads me to Tam's comment.
ReplyDelete@Tam -- "Is there another step to this quest?" Apparently not, since another step in the quest chain would have advanced the plot. :P